Hello new friends! I was so excited to post this, that it’s going up a little early. No, actually I’m going to a friends house Saturday night, who lives out of town and I want to make sure that if we decide to spend the night, it’s up when it should be. 🙂 I’m really excited about that, because I have a babysitter! Yes! That’s super exciting, the hubby and I don’t get many of those nights and I really need a break.
So anyhow, a little introduction to this piece. Oh this is my favorite part of the book (Liliana), the moment Liliana and Antonio meet. It’s an awkward situation. It’s pouring rain and Liliana is walking home and has just been offered a ride by someone that she doesn’t know. You really have to read the book, to completely understand this scene, but it is so hot, I wish we posted more than eight sentences because I’d love to share what happens next.
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He was quiet and I could feel him staring at me in the dark. I began to get nervous when he didn’t start driving right away, instead he turned on the inside lights of his car. I could feel my heart begin to thump heavily as I sat with my hands folded in my lap, too scared to look over at him. If he was going to hit me with something in my head, I didn’t want to see it coming. My mind filled with fear, in imagining what could potentially happen to me. Finally he began to speak and to my surprise, his voice relaxed me.
“Hi, I’m Antonio.” He said.
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NEVA SQUIRES-RODRIGUEZ 
Great tension building excerpt and perfect last line for the snippet. A simple introduction and suddenly all of her fears fade away. Lovely. Great 8.
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I’d be nervous too. That voice must be something.
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I’m glad he broke the silence and introduced himself. I felt the anxiety leading up to that moment. Good stuff!
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Hello Antonio!!! I’m Intrigued already… absolutely love your snippets!
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Hello guys, thank you so much for the phenomenal feedback. I just got home so I’ll be making my rounds now. Hoping everyone is enjoying their Sunday! 🙂
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Wow, love the tension! I can feel her mounting fear. Nice job!
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Wow–you did a fantastic job of describing her emotions! And your writing is really smooth–nothing tripped me up. Nicely done, Neva. 🙂
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That was a very tense scene until he broke the silence! *I* was ready to bolt out of the car LOL! Great 8…
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Super eight. Powerful and frightening until the last line that broke the tension. But is it enough? What happens next? This is on my TBR list for sure.
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Good tension. Without knowing the lead-up to this, I am wondering if she was pressured into getting in the car in the first place. Seems to me that to put herself into this frightening situation the alternative must have been worse.
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Very nicely done. Looking forward to more. Share the next eight lines next week : )
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Oh my you had me scared. So glad this snippet ended on the last line. Now I’m curious who he is. 🙂
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