Good morning friends. I’m so glad we’ve almost made it to Spring! Keep the hope alive, right everyone? I know some of you have also been battling extreme temperatures and here in Chicagoland we beat out a coldest temperature we had originally set in the 1930’s. The only thing I can say to that is BUUURRRR!!!!!
It’s so nice that we can write about places that are warm right? I’m taking you down south this week, so south that we are going to actually be in Venezuela, South America where Liliana is visiting “someone” and let’s just say that she is going to be headed out soon! This is from book 3, which I am still working on and which desperately needs a name. Let me know as the weeks pass if you all think of a good one. 🙂
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“A tourist huh?” He said loudly.
I looked away and noticed several people turn to glance at us. I had fallen into his trap.
“Not really.” I said quietly, “Excuse me, I have to find my father.”
I stood up and no sooner did I, than a crowd nearby caught my attention. Within seconds I heard a huge commotion and then there was gunfire.
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Oh, you’re doing a great job creating tension! One suggestion, and this is just my opinion, but I think the final paragraph in this snippet will have more of a punch if you skip the 2nd and 3rd sentence or combine them with your final paragraph. Just my two cents. I’m looking forward to finding out what happens next. Good luck finding a title, sometimes I think that’s the hardest part of the writing process.
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Good idea from Jess about your exciting eight. Makes the reader want more.
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Wow, the situation got dangerous in the blink of an eye! Great 8!
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Gunfire is never good to hear.
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So much for slipping away quietly. I wonder what’s going on in that crowd? Gunfire is rarely anything good.
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Awesome cliff hanger! LOL. Very well done. I can’t wait to see & read more!
The title, “No Turning Back” just came to me looking at In Too Deep. Just a thought.
Great 8! 🙂
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Ooh, I like that! Thanks Lauren!
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Oh man, if she gets back to the USA (with her children) alive, it’ll be a miracle. The twisted part is, she loves him. At least she did in the first 2 books. Maybe the ending of the second book finally killed her love. Wow…
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Yes! Thank you Teresa. I’m debating on adding a majorly twisted ending. We’ll see how it goes.
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Oh my, what did she walk into? It certainly sounds as if things are dangerous. This whole story is very edge-of-your-seat. Great 8.
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I agree with a lot of folks, the cliff hanger was really great! Good way to capture your reader’s attention.
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Yikes! Sounds like things are getting very serious. Love the snippet!
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What a way to end the snippet! You have my attention.
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This woman just cannot catch a break. I hope she gets out of there safely.
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Oh no! Hope no one is hurt!
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